Posted by Papa Cap at pcp464999pcs.shrpsr01.tn.comcast.net on February 10, 2003 at 13:40:20:
In Reply to: Save a life. Critique a script. posted by Raikus on February 10, 2003 at 13:12:43:
Overall, the piece was written very well. I didn't know what to expect going into this.
: Questions to consider:
: Do the flashback/fantasy sequences work?
It works in script form. The question is can the director pull off your intended meaning.
: Should the end be expounded upon?
Depends upon what you want to accomplish. Now, when someone sees it, they're gonna go, "That's it?!" It's a tension building scene with no ending. I assume you want to shoot it for film festivals. If you just want to get something out there, I say shoot it. Many people are self-proclaimed filmmakers and haven't done a damn thing. They always say, "Well, I'm GONNA shoot this..." or "I'm GONNA shoot that." The hard part is getting it done. So...get it done.
If you wanna trade scripts, drop me a line.
PapaCap
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