Posted by BrianLynch at cc707040-b.etntwn1.nj.home.com on September 17, 2001 at 00:41:48:
In Reply to: READ THIS POST NOW!! posted by Bleaker1712 on September 17, 2001 at 00:03:54:
: Go to my site and read my script. I'm trying to get opinions on it. The people on this board are the ones that might dig this film the most but I need feedback. Help a brotha out!
...it seems as though you're not really saying anything with it. And I know you're going for a Kevin Smith kinda thing, or at least are inspired by him judging by the far too obvious names of Brian and Jeff, but he knows what he's trying to say BEFORE he writes a scene. You just wrote and wrote and wrote. You gotta think to yourself, "why would people be into this, why would they want to see this, what makes this different?"
Nothing in it does. It's not bad, or good. It's really not anything. Figure out what you want to do and then try writing it.